Demons inner outer true
Wheedle come a part imbue
Work out purify the line
Make pristine come clean refine
Exorcise
Move all parts
Minds limbs lungs hearts
Cast out toxins meta- real
Challenge vessel to reveal
Divine.
Sublime.
Reach. Stretch. Climb.
Bright light.
tight poem – this is a style that is very tough for me
I feel compelled to write this way, reserving every word until its presence is necessary.
‘Reach. Stretch. Climb.’ until the treacle slips and your finger-tips graze the sun..always pays to exercise..Jae
It does, it does!
Says so much with so few words. Good job!
1. I agree with the message.
2. I could never mimic the presentation. Like Ollie said, I think it’s tough.
A tight write indeed. Good work, kiddo!
Great reminder to reach for that bright light.and exorcise those toxic demons. Very nicely penned.
I like this, Kim. It has a very Beat feel that gives it strength inside and out.
Oh Kim, how I do miss exercising and exorcising the way I used to be able to. I loved climbing to the top of a mountain, the feeling of strength and joy at the top, exhaustion, but the good kind at the bottom, achy muscles the next day. Or a week-long yoga retreat…really cleansing and empowering. Wonderful poem.
I like this. Each of us is responsible for casting out our own demons….and we CAN!. I appreciated this message, Kim.
A powerful write, Kim! To exorcise is a tough job. It involves the super natural. You’ve brought it out in the open with such ease! Great verse!
Hank
I feel as if I just did a work out in such a short time :)
Great write Kim.
I like the rhythm. The last four lines are a great mantra for exercising.
They sure do, Karen. I hadn’t thought of that, so appreciate your pointing it out.
Kim,
A great ‘feel-good’ feeling at play here. From the initial desire to cast out those demons, until that last push and sigh of relief…..An energetic flow:)
Eileen
A lovely progression!
Agree with Eileen re the feel good factor. I feel fitter reading your words!
Anna :o]
excellent short and sweet laced up tight.