“Millions of spiritual creatures walk the earth unseen, both when we wake and when we sleep.”
~ John Milton, Paradise Lost
sipping gin and juice
from a black coffee mug
seems the right
way
to end the day.
to amplify
the feeling
of your presence
I know.
I won’t see you.
but you’ll see me.
and you’ll know
what I told you
was true
Without you
you’ll know.
you’ll see
me.
And I know I won’t see you
which is why
I
end the day
the right way
from a black mug
sipping gin and juice
this made me think of that movie where she is still around even though she had died already and he can feel her presence…yeah…maybe a black coffee mug with gin and juice is not a bad idea then…
Enjoyed the poem, even more when I went back and read the title which explained everything!
cool verse…i love the wrap around in it, beginning to end and even in the middle you mirror a lot around your turn line…makes me wonder at what you told them but its easy enough to fill in that blank with the feeling i get from your words…
i like how this poem walks both forwards and backwards, and i feel a sting of loss within it… full of ghosts (and ghost brew) very well done kim
This is powerful, Kim. I like how the beginning and ending are the same. I find this haunting:
I know.
I won’t see you.
but you’ll see me
Ah, I am sure that there are many beings in our midst that we do not see…..but who see us. Darkly thought-provoking.
Kim, I agree the wrap round of this is effective for a haunting feel. Good one.
Pamela
The circular format. as others have said, seems to detach it a bit from every day logic–we see what we want to see–and I often wonder how long and how far wanting can be. Enjoyed this. Kim.
Dang, what a song! I’m eating the repitition up, the sounds, well constructed line work. An all-around great write, plus the message, personal, vulnerable, strong. I like very much!
An eerie piece Kim…and now I’ve a desire for some Paradise Lost…
I found this very poignant (and yet tough in the good kind of way), Kim. You get a strong feeling of character somehow – a bit hardboiled, and yet, well doing things right. Even the word “convening” is very suggestive here. k.
love the reconnecting stanzas top to end here. Really cool piece. Enjoyed. Thanks
Beautiful. There is so much we don’t know and too much happens that is unexplained to always be coincidence. I believe there are far more dimensions than we know exist and that our bodies here are the vehicle but the thing which drives it doesn’t die, it goes into another dimension and yes, I believe they walk the earth and, watch us. Some are good, some are bad.
This really is so effective Kim. It reaches right in and hits home but more so for its repetition and simplicity. Really enjoyed this.
Laughing — cool image. A fine way to honor someone gone — for both you and them!
I hope they don’t see us!! :-)
Beautiful, Kim. The retrospection and calmness this emits causes it to be both haunting and comforting at the same time. Excellent!
“I know.
I won’t see you.
but you’ll see me.
and you’ll know
what I told you
was true
Without you
you’ll know.”
I love this turn in the midst of the poem, reversing the dance and keeping the knowledge between the narrator and her ghostly friend . . . leaving, of course, a lump in my throat who share the experience. Not, in my case with a drink in the cup at the end of the day but by fastening my seat belt every time I get in the car. He wanted me to be safe, and I never cared before. And now I am sure he knows.
that the mug is black both hides the feeling and illuminates it..like the comfort of rocks in a pocket..maybe..jae
Very much like the comfort of rocks in the pocket…
Well-expressed tribute to a cherished memory. Like the aliteration of gin and juice and the down-to-earth (no pun intended) touch of the black coffee mug.
Hey Kim
rolling with the ghosts
sipping on gin and juice
but not laid-back . . .
perhaps more
terrified with the jitters!
Mind you
that could be the gin!
Ah, Arron… could be the gin… could be!
Hauntingly powerful poem. I love the gin and juice lines. They bring a bit of lightness to the situation.
I really enjoyed this! A masterpiece, written so well, wonderfully done! :) xox
So much nostalgia underlying this one, Kim. Yes, the combination of “spirits” lightens a poignant subject a bit. Love this.
An awesome piece, Kim.
Excellent!!!
Like this Kim,
“I know.
I won’t see you.
but you’ll see me.
and you’ll know
what I told you
was true
Beautifully lucid..simplicity amplified to great effect here. The shape and return is wonderful.
It grabbed me from the beginning and never let go, especially its circinate structure. Haunting and beautiful.
you’ll know what i told you was true. without you…
whoosh. so contemplative and inward-looking. very nice, Kim.